Thursday, July 12, 2012

HOW TO WRITE BOOKS--Taking Careful Aim


INKBLOTS July 10, 2012

Warm summer evening (I'm stiff from working on my house--poured concrete... they're making the stuff heavier than they used to; what gives?), good fellowship. John lamented his critique of Saving Grace from the intrepid Spear clan, one of my favorite families on the planet. I suggested asking follow-up questions to fine-tune exactly where character development is working and where it is not.

Dave leads off with his sequel to his futuristic thriller, the first in progress self publishing with Winepress. I think I've figured something out about Dave's writing. I think you write better when you are describing setting and character, but I think your dialog is stilted, artificial. It's your dialog that makes me think of a comic strip or graphic novel instead of more serious writing. Don't misunderstand me. I think you are moving steadily toward serious writing, but the dialog is the weak link, at least in my opinion. I would suggest trying it out loud, to others, to yourself, to your kids. I know this is early in the process on this book and I may not have the whole picture, but give it some thought. Dave feels like writing dialog is the easy part and the description and glue is the challenging part. Writing is about creating authentic characters who are unique, who think and speak as unique individuals. I would suggest being more intentional about the dialog. Listen to real people talking, their cadence, their contractions, idioms, sentence fragments, all of it.

Dougie Mac read his WW II novel, Rudy lobbing potatoes (that's not it's name). Good job of creating an ordinary life on the ship, conversations, peeling potatoes, god nuance in the conversation. Dougie caught some of attributing he was doing and discovered reading aloud, which is a good reason to be doing what we're doing this evening. I like the can you shoot a gun question and rejoinder. Dave suggested that this would be a great line to end a chapter on. Begin the next with the same question. Good idea. When you launch into the firing on the coal ship, I think your description should move to shorter, more clipped syntax. Save the cohesion for more peaceful descriptions. Again the reading aloud helps catch lots of stuff. You might try creating an onomatopoeia of the Lewis guns or other weaponry firing. Break up the syntax of the surrender, when they are lowering the Union Jack. You used a compound complex sentence structure, which works well in other contexts. Here you want more clipped, rapid-fire syntax. You've clearly done your homework on the Westfalia coal versus the brown coal of the English ship, inferior stuff. John pointed out that it didn't seem quite right that the heavy artillery did some damage but they struck their colors under heavy machine gun fire. David pointed out that crossing the equator is marked with hazing for the newly sailors, but that didn't happen her, though you mentioned the crossing.

We talked about the importance of keeping paragraphing concise, not long drawn out paragraphing in young adult fiction, and very often we can help mirror the pace of the action by shortening paragraph structure.

John reading from a book idea he had a gazillian years ago (Really, John doesn't look quite that old). About a Russian immigrant who comes to America and sets out to shaft the system, stealing cars, anything he could steal. The USA and the American Dream, laws they make here are a joke, take whatever you want. Like picking fruit off the tree. You have rights here. Too many togethers. The reading aloud reveals the awkward syntax. I felt like the back ground on his family, being adopted, all that, was a bit superficial, stereotypical. The novel will be a means of exposing the travesty of American welfare system. Be sure to not oversimplify it. Make sure you have the truly needy widow, with aids given to her by a lout of a husband who has long since run off on her, and she has her kids and two kids of her creep of a husband's from a previous liaison, all these she loves and wants to care for, but has no means to feed herself or them. John's ideas for the conclusion are good and noble. Good ideas for resolution, but watch for the over simplification. Dave suggested that he needed to feel more jet lag, bleary eyed after the long flight from Moscow. Prayer, as John and I were talking on the way out to 'Blots, doesn't happen much for real with us, because we are so self satisfied, have so much lying all about us, life comes so easy, why do I need to pray? John was telling me about a really good book, A Praying Life, by Paul Miller. Fantastic, convicting read: we are children dependent on the grace and strength of God alone for everything!

Mercenary crossbow vs. English longbow
I told the story of getting on the plane a couple of weeks ago in OKC, pawing through the flight magazines, and the kind lady next to me said, "I figure that if a fellow is looking at flight magazine reading options, he's in need of something good to read." I thought she might be a JW and was going to hand me the watchtower. But she explained that she had purchased a John Grisham she'd already read. Would I like to have it? (The Confession, a bit of a propaganda piece against capital punishment, where he shifted genre from fiction to preaching, and a novel that lacked authentic character development, and had a weak ending, IMHO). 

Frankly, it has been a while since I read a novel to myself simply for the reading of it. I feel the need for doing so, as I launch into another historical fiction novel this summer. I was impressed with Grisham's pace, and clipped verbiage. The story moves from point of view to point of view, so unlike what I try to do in my writing. But I'd been considering a dual point of view for my 14-th century historical fiction novel this summer. Here was the jolt I needed to launch forward.

Last I was up and read from my Wycliffe novel just underway (no working title yet), shifting from first person to the peasant perspective in third person. The opening chapters are at the Battle of Crecy, 1346, about the time Wycliffe commenced his studies at Oxford. John told me he could feel and see everything so clearly (it's so much easier to hear this kind of critique). The fellows made some helpful suggestions especially about the ending of the first chapter. I was overwriting in the transition. I feel like this switching perspectives has to be handled with the greatest of care for it to work. I hope it's working. Good, helpful blots time tonight for me. Hopefully so for all the men.

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